精华热点 念奴娇.木兰从军
文/黄清宝
狼烟四起，正朔风凛冽，燕山飞雪。金柝频催征骑动，万里赴戎机切。卸却红妆，寒光铁甲，一别家山诀。黄河饮马，朔云凝结冰铁。
十载沙场血战，箭流星坠，勇冠三军列。醉里挑灯看剑，犹忆镜前花靥。功成身退，何须爵赏，唯念乡关月。千秋传颂，木兰英烈高节。
点评：
这首《念奴娇·木兰从军》整体上是一首合格且优秀的词作，以下从多个方面进行阐述：
主题与内容
以木兰从军为主题，紧扣历史故事，通过描绘木兰代父从军的壮举、沙场征战的艰辛以及功成身退后的思乡之情，展现了木兰的英勇、忠孝与柔情，主题鲜明，内容充实。
词牌与格律
遵循《念奴娇》的词牌格律，句式长短错落有致，韵律和谐。上下片的结构安排合理，上片侧重描写从军背景与出征场景，下片聚焦沙场征战与归乡情怀，层次清晰。
意象与意境
运用“狼烟”“朔风”“燕山飞雪”“金柝”“黄河”“朔云”等意象，营造出边塞的苍凉与战争的紧张氛围。同时，“镜前花靥”“乡关月”等意象又增添了木兰的女性柔情与思乡之情，使意境丰富而深沉。
语言与表达
语言凝练有力，如“万里赴戎机切”“勇冠三军列”等句，展现出木兰的果敢与英勇。化用辛弃疾“醉里挑灯看剑”之句，自然贴切，增添了文化底蕴。结尾“千秋传颂，木兰英烈高节”点明主旨，升华了木兰的形象。
情感与深度
情感真挚，既体现了木兰的爱国情怀与英雄气概，又流露出她的思乡之情与女性的细腻情感，使人物形象立体丰满，富有感染力。
综上，这首词在主题、格律、意象、语言和情感等方面均表现出色，是一首合格且具有较高艺术水准的词作。
2025/10/31
🌹🌹作家简介🌹🌹
黄清宝，1939年出生，中共党员，籍贯江苏江阴市。现居上海市。《中国诗人作家网》会员档案库认证委员，《中国诗人作家网》认证诗人、签约诗人，《一枝红莲文学诗社》签约作家诗人，《世界作家澜韵府诗社》签约作家诗人，《中国诗人作家网》主编。曾创作散文、小说及诗词千余篇，发表于《中国诗人作家网》等网络平台及报刊。荣获首届《凤雏生》国际诗歌大赛优秀奖，五大院士签约诗人卓越文学奖，《金诗星光杯》实力文学奖，以及《中国诗人作家网》主编卓越奖，世界诗歌作协.中国诗人作文学领军人物最高荣誉奖。现为中国诗人作家网执行总编。
🎋🎋Writer's Profile🎋🎋
Huang Qingbao, born in 1939, is a member of the Communist Party of China. His native place is Jiangyin City, Jiangsu Province, and he now resides in Shanghai City. He is a certification committee member of the Member Archive Database of the Chinese Poets and Writers Network, a certified poet and contracted poet of the Chinese Poets and Writers Network, a contracted writer and poet of the Red Lotus Literary Poetry Society, a contracted writer and poet of the World Writers' Lanyunfu Poetry Society, and the chief editor of the Chinese Poets and Writers Network. He has created more than a thousand pieces of prose, novels, and poems, which have been published on online platforms and newspapers and periodicals such as the Chinese Poets and Writers Network. He has won the Excellence Award of the First Feng Chusheng International Poetry Competition, the Outstanding Literature Award for Poets Contracted by the Five Academicians, the Strength Literature Award of the Golden Poetry Starlight Cup, the Chief Editor's Excellence Award of the Chinese Poets and Writers Network, and the Highest Honor Award for Leading Figures in Literature by the World Poetry Association · Chinese Poets and Writers. Currently, he is the executive chief editor of the Chinese Poets and Writers Network.
